I am a student at South Hornby Primary School. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
In AKAROA I can smell the fresh air in the water. I hear the water swishing away from me. I see broken shells and castles. I feel the sand going though my feet. I taste an ice-cream on a hot day.
This made me remember when I went to akaora.This is awesome when you say I see broken shells and sand castle’s.How long did it take you to make this?Next time, you could do a we bit more like when you went there if you can remember.You are really good at making it look nice.What did you do there?
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This made me remember when I went to akaora.This is awesome when you say I see broken shells and sand castle’s.How long did it take you to make this?Next time, you could do a we bit more like when you went there if you can remember.You are really good at making it look nice.What did you do there?
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